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Creepy as hell, very enthralling, and not overly descriptive but giving a very clear picture of what's going on. In a sick kind of way I enjoyed reading this - ...

A memorial doesn't have to dance around meaning, but it should have something more in it - an image of what it was really like to be with her, poetic ...

I enjoyed reading this -- the linebreaks were a nice sight to see, they gave a much more natural flow to the poem [sometimes people new to a form panic ...

Where the heck are the critiques on this? It started out really well and ended well also, even if it did descend into abstract apostrophe in the middle. You have ...

I liked this poem -- it had such a strong atmosphere and so I enjoyed that aspect of it alot. The ending is very strong as well. Overall criticism... connecting ...

cube. box box box box box box box box box. sorry man XP I think this would work better if both box lines in each stanza were combined into one ...

I agree with the second part of oregongirl's comment. [this time, at least]. The rhymes were kind of cute but it's really hard to tell where you're going. Are you ...

The fact that this piece describes a specific story but could apply to many generic romances is definately a downfall. There's a whole specific history and culture behind that story ...

Then ending of this is simple and effective, and I liked it a lot; but the beginning is too simplistic and straightforward...I think it would work better if you implied ...

The repetition: agreed with Chandni. Usually to make repetition work it needs to be used in different ways each time it appears, and so take on slightly different meanings each ...

American Gods - Neil Gaiman His Dark Materials - Philip Pullman Something Wicked This Way Comes - Ray Bradbury [published in the sixties, so it makes the mark] If On ...

agreed with whence on the last point: when repetition works it's often when new meanings or ideas are connected with the same words. Take a look at this poem: Villanelle ...

size doesn't matter, it's how you use it. Dumb jokes aside: small poetry can be very nice, but it has to be condensed. You need to pack a lot into ...

The rhyme scheme is majorly limiting this, especially since the first 11 lines have the same rhyme, and the rhymes are all simple and one-syllable. It is really bloody hard ...

Claudette's advice is stellar. The only thing I have to add [besides maybe a bold on read ] is to watch out for redundancy/repetition. What could have been an interesting ...